[MV] The Super Wizard From Space #16: The Tragedy Of Sharkasaurus Rex, Part 6

[Wil Alambre]

On 2011-07-27, at 9:18 PM, Scott Eiler wrote:

> On 7/27/2011 12:57 PM, Wil Alambre wrote:
> 
>> And each of them had flatly refused to assist the Super Wizard From
>> Space.
> 
> Ah, thanks for remembering they're here.  If they've sworn to eliminate the Super Wizard, it's perfectly reasonable for them to sit this one out.

Giving them more screen-time (page-time?) would have probably muddied up the fast-paced action ending I was going for. And they didn't *really* have too much of a part of play here, something I recognized when I switch perspective to Theodor. The next arc or two will return back to them as the tournament progresses.

>> "I have been humiliated, my little fishy friend. By guests and by
>> beasts. Like a mule, stubbornly assisting and being taken advantage
>> of. And though I religiously follow the wondrous practices of
>> ultra-zen, as taught by my father and his father and his father
>> before him, down the line of Dharma...
>> 
>> "Even my great calm is being swallowed whole by your teacher."
> ...
>> "Smile, you son of a bitch," spat out Brody Dharma as he flung the
>> sphere.
> 
> Good explanation for the language.  I'll bet the Super Wizard's super-coolness is wearing down a bit too.  I noticed him say "We're gonna need..." last issue.

That, and I was cribbing "jaws" lines :P

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>> AUTHOR'S NOTES
>> 
>> Another arc that went longer than originally estimated and the last
>> issue ended up longer than my normal 1500 limit. But wrapped up now.
> 
> Congratulations on finishing the arc.  I bet next issue's gonna be exciting.

I imagine so! I was ready with an idea when a new HHC was announced :P Now, I might tweak or postpone it to work that in, as I'm pretty jazzed on teh idea!

>> I'm being a little lazy here, as I should give this another read
>> through just for clarity and sound, but meh, this entire arc would
>> benefit from a second or third draft as a whole. Maybe if I collect
>> it up for etherbacks or epub release.
> 
> I hesitate to humbly intrude upon your mighty adventure with my tiny quibble again, but when you come back for the edits, think:  He's, she's, it's.  His, hers, its.  I think you could have written "its" all through this issue and never gotten it wrong.

Damnit, I'm *still* doing this? Thanks, I it seems to be a regular bad habit I need to break out of! :)

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