LNH: 58.5 #11
martinphipps2 at yahoo.com
Fri Nov 2 06:21:49 PDT 2007
On Nov 1, 9:26 pm, Lalo Martins <lalo.mart... at gmail.com> wrote
a nice balance between story and exposition. If anything, you erred
on the side of too much exposition but as I've been accused in the
past of "hating" exposition then perhaps that's just me. :)
Seriously, though, I would have enjoyed seeing a bit more of the Irony
Man robot / Dialek gag, espcially an explanation as to why there were
so many in the end. I thought the key was to have the robots replace
the Legionaires so that the general public would not become alarmed by
their disappearnaces: multiple Irony Men would have had the effect of
making the general public suspcious.
I'm also confused by the ending.
> And back in the Looniearth, Contraption Man started deactivating
> the stasis pods. The New Misfits were saved.
It's a bit abrupt. Did something get cut by google? I remember you
had that problem before.
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