LNH: A Journey Through the Mind of the Seemingly Unstable

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Tom Russell wrote:
> I found it to be a very interesting story, even if I didn't always
> understand it. :-)

Well, that's encouraging. =)

> > Okay, I think that this thing's only saving grace is that it was better
> > than my first attempt.
>
> Which would actually make this your first attempt, since it was the
> first one you posted. :-)

You should be grateful I didn't post the original.  =P

> Feel free to do as many as you like-- it's not a contest with a
> deadline.

When my newly broken shoulder heals, and typing stops being so
restricted-to-left-handedly awkward, I'll take you up on that.  =)

> I might end up doing more of them myself, probably centered
> around Pants Rabbit Lad-- I don't see how else I'm going to motivate
> myself to write about him. :-)

Really? I quite enjoy Pants Rabbit Lad -- I think he's an interesting
character. I was doing a review of Whatever Happened To Suicide
Werewolf before, but I made too many typos with my singular arm and
gave up. I'll get it done ASAP.  =)

> that the scenes were very short-- sometimes, at an extreme, only one or
> two sentences.  That freed me up to concentrate on making sure the
> sentences flowed (somewhat) in each scene.  Then, my main concern
> wasn't that each sentence flowed into the next like a chain of
> seventy-five parts, but rather that each scene fit in, structurally,
> with the others.

I found a similar thing, sometimes -- I noticed I had lots of short
scenes, and if I got stuck and I could be bothered, I would make a
short list of possible sentences that could work next, and chose the
one that worked the best.

> How well I did is for the reader to decide, but if I pulled it off half
> as interestingly as Mitchell and Martin have, I must have done very
> good indeed.

I actually think you pulled it off better than Martin or I -- mine is
very jumbled and hard to follow, and while I loved Martin's piece,
having a character who couldn't speak proper English anyway was a very
clever way of slipping around some of the harder aspects of the
challenge.

> ==Tom

~ Mitchell.