SW10: The Last Chocolate Crop
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Sun Feb 21 11:49:24 PST 2010
On Feb 20, 11:03 pm, Andrew Perron <pwer... at gmail.com> wrote:
> On Sat, 20 Feb 2010 19:05:33 +0000 (UTC), Scott Eiler wrote:
> > On Feb 20, 1:32 am, Andrew Perron <pwer... at gmail.com> wrote:
> >> On Fri, 19 Feb 2010 01:46:57 +0000 (UTC), Scott Eiler wrote:
> >> Nice! Far more narratively complete than a lot of your earlier stuff, with
> >> some good crunchy detail. Only complaint: The ending felt a bit abrupt.
> > Thanks! Sorry about the ending; Adu was tired and so was I.
> That's fair.
Hmm, I could maybe give Adu a bit more trouble getting recognized when
he needs help.
> >> Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, and some good future plot hooks!
> > Everything's a plot hook in my world, but I was actually trying to
> > hang something on a previous hook. I've used this main character for
> > several years now, but until now I haven't considered his powers or
> > their origin. Now I should really consider his costume, so I can make
> > a cover for the story.
> Ooh, neat. He did feel more realized.
> Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, who has no idea how to do a
> non-offensive African tribal costume.
Indeed. Early research indicates, "thong" would be a better word than
"costume". I figure the only way out is to use an actual photo for
the cover: either a statue of an African warrior, or an age-
progressed picture of an African prince.
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