8FOLD: Mighty Medley # 32, September 2016, by Messrs. Brenton, McClure, Perron, Russell, and Stokes

[Scott Eiler]

On 2016-09-11 18:06, Saxon Brenton wrote:

> I originally started writing a penultimate chapter depicting Joan
> returning to heaven and notifying the memesmiths. I then realised
> that it would be (a) another instance of repeating information the
> readers already had, and (b) effectively padding at a point in the
> story when the pacing was supposed to be speeding up to a climax. So
> I decide to chop it, and then went into a creative funk with
> procrastination that contributed to the aforementioned being late.
> With the benefit of hindsight that seems to have gotten rid of one
> pacing problem while substituting another.

I agree, leaving the story from Deirdre's point of view there was a good 
decision.

> Analysing it: perhaps a final booby trap, with the ManWTGG
> anticipating a possible escape, him leaving a supposedly cunning
> backup contingency (probably leaving the hund as a hidden guard) that
> threatens to interfere with the timing of the plans.

I'm pretty bad at putting *extra* suspense in stories, but I'm working 
on it.  For your story, as a thought exercise, I imagined this Mundane 
Egg at the point of becoming, and just needing a little extra push from 
someone willing to sacrifice herself.  Like, Deirdre.


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When you *are* the leader... whatever goes wrong... whether you did it
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I know. - Archie Andrews

- from Archie #617, March 2011, scripted by Alex Simmons.