8FOLD/ACRA: Jolt City # 23, "...Their Last Adventure!", NOTES

[Scott Eiler]

On 9/7/2015 5:59 PM, Tom Russell wrote:
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ah, yes, Notes are a good way to put information in without slowing down 
the story.  To honor that way, I'm going to put my comments here in no 
particular order.

*  I recall Derek and Martin were stranded on a world where *everything* 
wanted to kill them.  And I suspect that still happened somewhere.  But 
I think it worked out better this way.  The multiple Dereks and Martins 
got all those good chances to express their heroism - and get one of 
themselves back.  And that "bridge" scene made for a better scene than 
Everything-Wants-To-Kill-Us-World would have.  (Thinking of Stanford 
Bridge, were you?)

*  I like the idea of Jolt City being the city of Joliet, err, Juliet. 
And that's a pretty cool conspiracy behind it.  I'm wondering whether 
the point man of the 1000-year levitical order behind the conspiracy, 
should have a good comeback ready whenever someone mentions the Catholic 
Church excommunicating scientists.  But then, he may have been placed 
there purely for being Mr. Congeniality in just such a crisis situation.

*  Oh, good tie-in with the Nevada incident!  And thanks for the note to 
explain it.  Now, can we see the *happy* Dyzen'thari sometime?  8{D>

*  One part action to two parts epilogue, was fine with me.  Especially 
if that's who I think it is, walking on panel for that last scene.

... So, yes, I enjoyed this story.  Isn't it fun to finally finish a 
year's worth of stories that takes several years to tell?  ... Well, it 
was fun when I finally finished my 2005 stories this year, anyway.


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When you *are* the leader... whatever goes wrong... whether you did it
or not... *you* are held responsible. - Barack Obama

I know. - Archie Andrews

- from Archie #617, March 2011, scripted by Alex Simmons.