MISC: The Girl Who Saved the World...5

Drew Perron pwerdna at gmail.com
Thu Nov 26 23:03:38 PST 2015


On 11/9/2015 12:08 AM, George Phillies wrote:
> Green – slices, scrapes, abrasions … my skin is being returned to
> perfection as I lie in bed.  My face was cleaned up by the Namestone
> before I faced the Martyr, but the rest of me was my problem.

Ah, there we go - definitely Eclipse. (I'd still put some explicit "this 
happened in the Namestone fight" drop earlier in the chapter.) (Also, re: this 
particular statement, that's interesting that it'd do that.)


> I had done mind control on myself, to
> ensure that whenever I was in a really serious fight, escaped, and got
> back here safe, I would for sure do certain things, whether I wanted to
> or not.

Interesting. I wonder if casual self-mind-control is common here, or if it's 
special to Eclipse? That's a good wonder, mind you.

> Yes, the scan runs at the speed of thought, but it has a lot
> of mind to scan.

Not a humble girl. <3

> Meanwhile, I hovered above my body, looking into my
> momentarily sightless silver-gray eyes and platinum-white eyelashes,
> listening to me breathe, ever so slowly.

Ooooooooh. <3

> Mum had been very careful about showing me exactly how
> to arrange that preset, because potentially it was very dangerous to its
> user.

Mum, eh. <3

> ...then I remembered.  It was the most wonderful memory in the
> world.

Awwwwww. <3

> Or would have been, if everything didn’t hurt so much, not to
> mention I was totally exhausted.

Heeheehee. <3 (Nitpick: This might be better as two sentences.)

> I’d solved the Maze, the Maze that
> defeated Julius Caesar and Cortez and Jackie Fisher and the French
> Imperial Guard.

This is a *really* good way of establishing scale.

> Anything I called, the Maze could call back at threefold the
> power level, and I was not going to give the Maze any advantages.

Wow. o.o So she beat it without powers?

>    As I climbed the stairs,  I was desperately trying to recover my power
> levels.  I could barely crack The Sky open.  Then with an effort that
> left me dizzy and gasping for breath I managed to reach down to The
> Breaking Wave.

Evocative!

> Just before I sliced the
> last fellow open from guggle

A hidden pocket for a flask of alcohol.

> to zatch

A minor functionary in the Celestial Court.

> I kept reaching for power levels, further and further down. They came
> more easily. The Sea of Grass, The Temple, The Sun, and The Matrix
> opened up.  GR, I did not forget to bring up my shields.  I might have a
> reception committee.  Before I reached the top of the stairs, I was sort
> of back to normal.  I could touch all the power levels I can normally
> reach. I just couldn’t tap them for very much.  Not yet.  I could go way
> deep into my gifts if I had to.  I hoped I didn’t.

Drew "flashbackery" Perron


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