8FOLD/HCC: Journey Into # 19, "Wobblies on a Train!"

[Tom Russell]

On Sunday, June 29, 2014 10:52:27 PM UTC-4, Andrew Perron wrote:
> On 6/29/2014 2:00 PM, Tom Russell wrote:
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> > DRAMATIS PERSONAE.
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> > - Kate Morgan, DR. METRONOME II.
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> >    Can phase through matter.
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> >    Piano tutor, aged 23 in 2008.
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> >    Outlaw due to the Fitzwalter Rule.
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> > - Bethany Clayton, KNOCKOUT MOUSE.
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> >    Controls the density of her right hook.
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> >    Graduate student, aged 25 in 2008.
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> >    Lying due to the Fitzwalter Rule.
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> Oooooh. Doublegasp.
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> > Kate used to spend a lot of time worrying about Simon and all
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> > the time he spent watching train DVDs and talking about gauges. But
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> > then she realized that it made him happy, or as happy as he ever got
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> > anyway, and she was okay with that. She'd settle for that.
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> >     It might not be the best parenting strategy, and some nights she
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> > wonders if she's screwing them up.
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> Honestly, seems like a good parenting strategy to me.
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> >     Of course she spoke too soon. The metronome belt not only pulls her
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> > atoms apart whenever she needs to slide through solid matter, it also
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> > makes her incredibly sensitive to the presence of other people whose
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> > powers, whether natural or technological, allow them to defy the laws
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> > of physics for fun and/or profit.
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> Tesla Index!
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> > Bethany is a little surprised by the number of people in the station.
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> > An airport, she would understand. Maybe even a bus station. But a
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> > train? Who rides a train these days?
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> FEH >:/

Should be noted, as always, that I don't necessarily agree with my characters. :-)

In fact, I'm quite partial to trains; I've been more successful with my train-themed board games than any other.

> >     He clearly doesn't feel the same way. Indeed, he seems furious that
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> > she dared to impede his path. "What's done cannot be undone," he
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> > huffs. He doesn't even help her up.
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> What the hell, man. I hope you're the bad guy. >:/

Got it in one. :-)


> *Very* nice viewpoint shifting.

Thank you kindly. This sequence was really the crux of the story, and I wasn't sure how well it was going to work with the rewinds. (Got a decidedly mixed reaction from my focus group.) Writing this scene was one of those times I wished I was telling these stories in comics, because though bubbles would get most of this across without having to "replay" over the same bits again and again.


> >     "Oh brave new world," he hisses with contempt, "that has such...
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> > people in it."
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> Ah, Hotspur!

I know I kinda gave it away with that one-- most of his other dialogue is a little more obscure.

> >     That doesn't happen, though. Kate leaps towards her and for a
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> > split-second Bethany feels Kate's hand on her leg, then feels her
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> > atoms shimmering again. She sinks into the car, then Kate pulls her
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> > back up.
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> Good teaming <3 <3 <3

Thanks!

> > "So, my lovelies," says Dr. Fay over the speaker phone,
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> DOCTOR FAY WOO

I think she's appeared in more issues of JOURNEY INTO than anyone else.

> >     "Still not super-thrilled. Would you be comfortable lying to me?"
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> >     "I am completely confident in my ability to do this."
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> >     "Works for me," says Bethany.
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> BEST TEAMUP

Thank you very kindly. I was trying to borrow the feel of the old Team-Up books like Marvel Team-Up, Two-In-One, and a less insane Brave and the Bold.

> Such yay. <3
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> Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, rly cute story.

Thanks! Not everything I write is about Broody McBrooderton and his stay in Despairville. :-)