LNH20: Kung-Fu Holmes
pwerdna at gmail.com
Tue Feb 21 05:34:18 PST 2012
On Thu, 16 Feb 2012 19:35:52 +0000 (UTC), Tom Russell wrote:
> On Feb 16, 11:25 am, Andrew Perron <pwer... at gmail.com> wrote:
>> Interesting. XD It was funny, but it kinda felt like it was missing a
> Structurally, the "punchline" is the eliding of a punchline-- the
> story, such as it is, adds things they have to deal with, but rather
> than resolve them, it's all just ...'d away. It's like a shaggy dog
> story in that respect, but how successful it was, of course, depends
> on the reader.
I think the problem with that is structural - it comes too early to really
serve as the punch.
> There's another "punchline" that's also elided-- the story and its
> characters "forget" a character by the end. And maybe that doesn't
> work as well as it would have if I had pointed out the fact that he
> was forgotten, but then he wouldn't be forgotten. I dunno. I'm
> experimenting, and of course the problem with that is everything
> doesn't always work. :-(
> But feedback, such as yours and Scott's, will ensure that the next
> experiment is better. :-)
Is super truth!
Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, will one day stop speaking English
entirely, most likely.
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