[8Fold/Contest] Journal Into... #14 : All Us Zombies (HC13)
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Mon Sep 27 11:59:14 PDT 2010
On Mon, 27 Sep 2010 05:30:28 +0000 (UTC), Saxon Brenton wrote:
> But the diabolical Professor Longitude had to get out of the
> mindset of fighting heroes if he was going to battle against... himself!
Dun dun dunnnnnn!
> Massive sub-sonic force penetrated the force field and shook the
> diabolical Professor Longitude like a rattle. He barely had enough time
> to adjust the inertial dampeners to compensate. Still, he had remained
> standing in the face of his enemy.
Ooooh, nice way of getting around a forcefield.
> "Lies!" spat the counterpart Professor Longitude, and activated
> an ID insinuator to reduce his opponent to gibbering madness. However
> the diabolical Professor Longitude had an ESProtector to keep out any
> psychic attacks.
They *laughed* when he wanted to play a psion in 4th! Well, WHO'S LAUGHING
> Of course, it now occurred to the diabolical Professor Longitude
> that if this interloper was from a parallel Earth then he could use a
> quantum destabiliser to rip the counterpart Professor Longitude free
> from this strata of space-time and send him drifting helplessly between
> continua. But when he tried he found that the counterpart Professor
> Longitude had taken the precaution of imbedding himself in the local
> universe by bringing his reality quotient up to parity; he wouldn't be
> budged by anything short of the space-time shredder... Ooo, now there
> was an idea.
Stealing technology from the hamsters, eh? Tsk tsk.
> "Oh, I dare! I am your son, come back in time to wipe clean the
> reputation of my evil father!" declaimed Doctor Longitude.
> "Then I will ensure that wear protection when entertaining myself
> with my concubines," said the diabolical Professor Longitude.
> "Your clonal son, raised in an alternate future of the antimatter
> universe!" added Doctor Longitude through gritted teeth.
Of course, it's all so simple!
> A black cape would expect treachery. Maybe he could throw his counter-
> part off guard and lull him into a false sense of security by...
> honouring an agreement to help one another?
> Uhm, no.
XD That's... great.
>"And you know, *Dad*," he said, making that last word a
> thing of scorn,
That seems more casual than he's been so far.
> Doctor Longitude arrived back at his home base and went to report
> to his grandfather. Yes, his grandfather. The villainous and long-
> you've-actually-seen-the-body Silver Age Professor Longitude.
> "Yes, I watched the confrontation on the transluminal interocitor
> you created," said the Silver Age Professor Longitude.
> "...since you have the genetic disposition for mad science that I
> lack. I will plan a campaign against him. You will supply the mad
> science technology to counter his inventions. Together we will harass
> him - and then when he at his weakest, I will destroy him." The Silver
> Age Professor Longitude smiled at the thought. "Put him down like a
> rabid dog."
Oooooh, shivery. <3 I'd like to see these people come back.
> I sat up until after midnight and into the morning of the 26th to
> get this ready for posting just under the deadline of the 25th USA time,
> and then discovered the date extension. So I took an extra day to do
> some polishing. Nevertheless the end bit still seems info-dumpy and
> rushed. Sorry.
Actually, I thought this one had a really good energy to it! The end was
exposition-y, but it made sense and had characterization. The story as a
whole was zippy and fun.
> So, okay, yes, the header was stuffed up. ('Journal Into' my
> overweight backside). It seems that not so much polishing went
> into it to correct that little error, after all.
You know, I didn't even notice. >>;
> And now that I think to check, it's _Journey Into_ rather than
> _Journey Into..._ these days.
Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, still prefers the ellipsis.
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