STARFALL/HCC: Going Solo #3: Fight or Flight

Phantasm phantom_belcher at
Fri May 21 17:52:26 PDT 2010

Ever have that feeling where you know you hit the SEND button too soon
when writing an email, knowing the email you just sent was only half-

That's the feeling I have towards this piece.  It reads like a first
draft, but I've realized that that's because it IS the first draft.
It hasn't been thoroughly expanded, it's needlessly hasty in some
areas and overly expositional in others.  The action is choppy, the
setting ill-defined, and Stardancer just seems too good to be true -
especially at the end.

So, my question to you, the denizens of RACC, is this: what would YOU
have had Stardancer do at various points?  Also, what could the bad
guys have done more to hinder her?

Thanks in advance.

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