LNH/Contest: Legion of Net.Heroes Volume 2 #35 HCC8

[Saxon Brenton]

Scott replied:
>>   Kind of unfocused as a story.
>
> The heroes seemed highly focused to me, and the battle was exciting.
> 
> It would have been nice to have a visual effect for when spots and
> stripes battle... but I suppose that's the sort of thing that mortal
> eye was not meant to see.
 
[Before I get into the reply proper, I'll just note: AAAaaargh!!!  I was 
so busy trying to finish the story off and post it yesterday afternoon 
that I COMPLETELY FORGOT to have Occultism Kid make the throwaway comment 
about plaid versus paisley among the other paraochial level dualities.]
 
Okay then.  Perhaps I'm being overly picky, but my gut feeling is that 
I only used the concept of opposites as a way of picking a theme villain 
and hanging a superhero story on it, rather than exploring the concept.  
If it had of been longer I probably would have had more emphasis on the 
two Lords, and perhaps got into their headspaces.  As it is the story 
*does* work better than the last time I did a HHC entry which didn't 
*quite* manage to focus on the concept (LNHv2 #31 - the 'kitbashed hero' 
with Unity, W.I.L.B.U.R., and Limp-Asparagus Lad). 
 
I agree that the fight scene works well (something of a pleasant surprise, 
because it was the last bit written and was literally being worked on 
while I was doing my Sunday desk shift yesterday).  However for the most 
part the I think it works because it's mostly got lots of good character 
interaction.  All three leads were fun to write for one reason or another.
 
---
Saxon Brenton
Daleks not only don't have noses, they don't a sense of humour.  So if 
you trap one in a Monthy Python skit they will predictably self-destruct 
in confusion and fear.
  
   		 	   		  
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