[LNH] 58.5 #45: Who Cares If Anyone Reads This, I'm Going to Finish It!
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Fri Feb 27 11:46:14 PST 2009
On Fri, 27 Feb 2009 17:40:14 +0000 (UTC), Andrew Perron
<pwerdna at gmail.com> wrote:
And now, to comment on it! And make tiny grammar nitpicks!
>"Yay Sluggy, worship the comic. Anyway, I was saying. Uh, I
>was, wasn't I? What were we talking about again? And btw, is
>anyone else hungry?"
Using "BTW" in dialogue makes the baby Ultimate Savior cry.
>"Ah. Well. I'm looking for an universe."
A universe. `` The word begins with a vowel, but not a vowel sound.
>"Have you checked Green's universe?", Bonnie offered.
>"My universe isn't dead", Green corrected. "Just Earth."
Really. O.o How does that work? He's from the Legion of Occult Heroes'
>"So", said Pantra. "Anybody else hungry? I'm thinking
Heeheehee. Good moment.
>Then a platoon of black-uniform-heavily-armed types, kind of like
>the new half-season of Heroes which is totally ripping off Beige
>Countdown (no, absolutely not Marvel Comics, it has to be Beige
>Countdown, because we're cooler)
>"There is no fish in the lake", said one of the soldiers.
Are no fish. ``
Overall, good, though it suffers from "reacting to the last chapter
and setting up the next one" syndrome.
Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, and now I'm all finished on Birth
of a Villain!
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