MISC: The Girl Who Saved The World Part 3
Drew Perron
pwerdna at gmail.com
Sun Nov 22 22:32:01 PST 2015
On 11/5/2015 10:34 PM, George Phillies wrote:
> Aside: The explosive throwing katana is, of course, the top-level
> weapon of the Spiderman giant combat mecha, as seen on the live-action
> Japanese spiderman TV series. I am rewriting the early pieces a bit.
Ooooooh, nice ref. :D
> “Where is she, little girl?” Valkyria snapped. “Where is the bearer of
> the Holy Namestone?” Kang stared sharply at the video. The Peace
> Enforcers must have been en route while Eclipse confronted the Martyr,
> if they did not know her name.
Interesting. I'm not sure what that implies.
> “Aren’t you … isn’t the real Bearer a bit taller?” Valkyria asked.
>
> “I am tall. Wait! Isn’t the real Valkyria a bit less … pudgy?” Eclipse
> responded.
Oh snap~
> “Give it to you? You and which army?” Eclipse said languidly.
>
> “This one.” Valkyria waved her fingers. Most of the League of Nations
> Elite Strike Force appeared at her back. They began to fan out, left
> and right, moving toward Eclipse.
This is a good moment, but it feels like it needs to be more epic - more
description of the force, its bigness and overwhelmingness.
> Eclipse gestured, ending with hand facing skyward. The Namestone
> appeared, its cerulean fire burning a few inches above her palm. The
> Namestone’s tuneless tune was heard distantly. Eclipse, Kang saw, had
> brought up her own body aura, a color not different from the
> Namestone’s, and what sounded to be her own theme music, clearly audible
> in Durand’s microphone.
Similarly, I would describe the music.
> “You defy the League! International law specifies: The League of
> Nations owns the Namestone. Hand it over!” Valkyria shouted.
>
> “You know the Maze Rule: Namestone belongs to he who takes it. I took
> it,” Eclipse answered calmly.
>
> “The Namestone is too dangerous for mortals,” the Screaming Skull
> announced.
Then wouldn't it be too dangerous for y-- aw screw it
> Teleport, Kang thought, the waterfall and
> bells are the material traces of her teleport. And someplace in Europe,
> a team of teleport blockers are somewhere between having splitting
> headaches and being little clouds of incandescent plasma.
Hm. I'm confused as to why the teleport blockers are in Europe and not here. o.o
Drew "I mean there's probably a good reason" Perron
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