LNH20: Kung-Fu Holmes

[Andrew Perron]

On Thu, 16 Feb 2012 19:35:52 +0000 (UTC), Tom Russell wrote:

> On Feb 16, 11:25 am, Andrew Perron <pwer... at gmail.com> wrote:

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>> Interesting. XD It was funny, but it kinda felt like it was missing a
>> punchline.
> 
> Structurally, the "punchline" is the eliding of a punchline-- the
> story, such as it is, adds things they have to deal with, but rather
> than resolve them, it's all just ...'d away.  It's like a shaggy dog
> story in that respect, but how successful it was, of course, depends
> on the reader.

I think the problem with that is structural - it comes too early to really
serve as the punch.

> There's another "punchline" that's also elided-- the story and its
> characters "forget" a character by the end. And maybe that doesn't
> work as well as it would have if I had pointed out the fact that he
> was forgotten, but then he wouldn't be forgotten.  I dunno.  I'm
> experimenting, and of course the problem with that is everything
> doesn't always work. :-(

Is truth!

> But feedback, such as yours and Scott's, will ensure that the next
> experiment is better. :-)

Is super truth!

Andrew "NO .SIG MAN" "Juan" Perron, will one day stop speaking English
entirely, most likely.